Please critique my fund raising letter :)

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maybe remove the "a" fourth line down; "I have started my fund raising off with a personal donation of a $100"

Done.

and in the same paragraph; "Your donation will bring us closer to our goal and help with Habitat for Humanity of Camden County first Women Build." Maybe looks better as "Your donation will bring us closer to our goal of two-thousand dollars and help fund Habitat for Humanity of Camden County's 'First Woman Build'

Numbers talk so I'm leaving them in and the "Women Build" is a Habitat thing so I have to leave that in.

Maybe encapsulation and first letter capitals for the event title,
'Blabla blah Blablab Lablabla Blabla' or (Blabla blah Blablab Lablabla Blabla)

We are on the same page with this The event is actually bold in my printed letter and looks good.

And maybe even get some stationary/letterhead from Habitat for humanity, or have them print it up for you so it looks nice n formal.

I have the logo I designed on the letter .... guess I forgot to mention it

You may also want to discribe what the first woman build is about. If it's something that you didn't organise, maybe just cut-paste a short discription from HFH's website.

I thought about this but wanted to keep the letter to one sheet of paper and the font size is already a bit smaller than I would like it to be.

Great suggestions! Thanks!